Savath
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Blod Alv Beskyttende
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Post by Savath on Aug 13, 2008 7:25:10 GMT -5
...And then I ask myself.
As I sit at my computer, I let my mind wander. Such radical thoughts that no one else would ponder. I look into the void of what I call a mind, ...And then I ask myself; "What if I burnt all that was mine?"
Would I stand by and watch as the fires consumed my live? Or would I battle the flames, and save it all with the edge of a knife. Would I stand there and grovel as my stomach begins to turn? ...Or would I ask myself; "What else is there to burn?"
What if I burned all the bad men on the earth? Would people praise me as a saint from the day my mother gave birth? Or would I be alone after I burned it all, and everything was gone? The earth, the moon, the sun... ...And then I would ask myself; "What have I done?"
Thank you all who read my poem! I dont do this often, so I might be a little rusty. Thank you again though!
UPDATE: Please let me know if you would like to see more from me, poems, short stories, artwork. Thank you!
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Kirfkin
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Noble Protector
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Post by Kirfkin on Aug 24, 2008 11:01:16 GMT -5
I'm not a great critique of poetry (but I can do it if I take more time, if you really want me to) , but I did enjoy it, and I could read more if you have more.
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Post by Briyanna on Aug 27, 2008 13:33:33 GMT -5
Though I've given my thoughts on this to you already, I just wanted to post here that I would like to see more.
<.< And that you inspire me to work on my own. I've been slacking. <3
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Post by Nauloera on Sept 8, 2008 10:26:57 GMT -5
More please. ;D
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